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Kia ora. In Te Ngahere we have been doing writing. For our writing this week we were writing about why the Paiha School pump track is special to our community. Our focus is passive voice and present tense. If you do not know what passive voice and present tense are I can explain it to you. Passive voice is not using I, me we. Here is an example. Rocks are like the bones of the earth,and water represents life. As you can see I am not using I me we. present tense is something that is present now. Here is a example for present tense Some of the descents of the early Moriori still live on rekohu. That sentence is present because of the word live. If you want to give me feedback about my writing comment down below. Here is my writing .

My writing:


What I am writing about is the paihia school pump track
Do you have a special place were you and your family can go and have fun?. For many families it is the Paihia School pump track. The pump track at paihia School is special because it’s free for anyone who comes here and it is the only safe pump track in paihia for the little kids. The paihia school pump is special to the paihia community because keep us nice and fit, it is safe for all of the little kids like my sister and it .The paiha school pump track is a community pump track it is for anyone who comes here and it is opened any time to anyone.