My writing

Kia ora bloggers In Te Ngahere we have been doing writing. We were learning to use words to create powerful images and emotional responses for our audience. My focus was to use lots of ideas that connect to the topic and each idea is supported by extra information, detail or facts that explain my thinking elaboration. What I think was easy to do was use word to create a powerful images. What I think I can do better is use words to describe what the person looks like.

This is a shared writing we had to go and turn it into our own words. here is my writing Pigeon Impossible.

Quickly gazing at my watch, I can't be late, I can’t be seen, I must be on time. SCREECH!!!! The noise of car tyres screeching. I must be more careful! Getting run over by a car is not on my to do list today.


I can’t trust anybody. I look around suspiciously to see if anyone was following me I almost walked into a tree thats not on my to do list as well.


I walk past I grab the briefcase and find somewhere to sit. I take a big bite out of my donut and open the briefcase I look at pigeon, the pigeon looks, at me.


I break, a tiny bit of my donut, then I throw, it. The pigeon comes closer then I move back squark squark squark!!! The pigeon said


The pigeon jumps in the briefcase, I run, after the briefcase. BOOM of into the air, goes the missile, I start to feel nervous, all of my anger, is coming out and I don’t want that to happen. Out of know were the briefcase start to fly I jump on top Whoosh here we go. I get my donut I give it to the pigeon and I jump off the briefcase.


Whoosh BOOM I walk away like nothing even happened.